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RE: FW: New authorization draft: draft-ietf-opes-authorization-03

2004-04-05 14:27:29
Andre,
Thanks
will fix and re-publish tom.

Abbie


-----Original Message-----
From: Andre Beck [mailto:abeck(_at_)bell-labs(_dot_)com] 
Sent: Monday, April 05, 2004 5:20 PM
To: Barbir, Abbie [CAR:1A11:EXCH]
Cc: OPES Group
Subject: Re: FW: New authorization draft: 
draft-ietf-opes-authorization-03


Abbie,

Looks good. Some nitpicks, mostly wrt to the uppercase keywords:

Section 3.3: "Implementation MUST not prohibit..."

"not" should be uppercase

Section 4.1: "The rule author, MAY not know specific service..."

delete comma; MAY should be lowercase

Section 4.1.3: "...modifications to the request MAY need..."

MAY should be lowercase

Section 4.2.3: "Some OPES services MAY need to be invoked..."

MAY should be lowercase

Section 4.3: "...with the architecture [ref ARCH] and this document."

should be a reference to [1]

Section 5.1.2: "...authorization databases MAY be easier..."

MAY should be lowercase

Section 5.1.3: "Authentication MAY be necessary..."

MAY should be lowercase

Section 5.5: "Tthe ability to prevent Traffic..."

should be "The"

-Andre

Abbie Barbir wrote:
 

-----Original Message-----
From: Barbir, Abbie [CAR:1A11:EXCH]
Sent: Friday, April 02, 2004 11:24 AM
To: Markus Hofmann; OPES Group
Cc: 'Marshall Rose'
Subject: New authorization draft: draft-ietf-opes-authorization-03


All,
 
Attached is the -03 of the authorization draft.
 
I have added a terminology and security sections  + fixed 
MUST etc.. .
 
Please review so we can re-submit to the IETF.
 
Abbie
 




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