At 11:43 PM +0100 1/14/05, Harald Tveit Alvestrand wrote:
Folks,
as you can see, version -04 is out.
It should reflect pretty accurately the items that seemed to have
consensus as of last night; on still open issues, it contains either
the same text as before or some proposed text.
Harald,
I have a couple of comments below; I will address some of the other
questions raised by Margaret and Rob by responding to their mails.
Also, note: the ISOC Board is reviewing the -04 version and my
comments should not be interpreted as the full extent of ISOC's
comments, those will be sent soon.
-- In 2.1
IAOC: Internet Administrative Oversight Committee, defined by this document.
Should be IETF rather than Internet (especially with the current
governance discussion underway unless we really want to liven that
discussion up :-). I think the references in the document itself are
OK but I did not do a thorough check.
-- In 2.2 principle 8 - note: this is not a critical change, but it
may be helpful to more accurately reference later text in the
document.
The IASA, in cooperation with ISOC, shall ensure that sufficient
s/reserves/reserves or other mechanisms/
exist to keep the IETF operational in the case of unexpected events
such as income shortfalls.
-- In 5.6 Operating Reserve
As an initial guideline and in normal operating circumstances, the
IASA should have an operating reserve for its activities sufficient
to cover 6-months of non-meeting operational expenses, plus twice the
recent average for meeting contract guarantees. However, the IASA
shall establish a target for a reserve fund to cover normal operating
expenses and meeting expenses in accordance with prudent planning.
This doesn't seem to parse clearly - are you suggesting that the
targeted reserve fund will be different from the initial guideline as
described in the first sentence (or maybe it's a timeframe
difference?)? If you want to leave it up to IASA (IAOC?), why not
say so directly, perhaps referencing the "under normal operating
circumstances" etc. etc.
Minor editorial comments:
- In 3.1 6th para - delete redundant "should"
- In 3.2 1st para - delete redundant "be"
- In 4 4th para - delete redundant "as"
Again, thanks to everyone (and especially Bert, Rob and Henrik) for
all the work.
Regards,
Lynn
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