I further note that schishol(_at_)nortel(_dot_)com gets bounced by Nortel as a
non-existant address. Is there an updated address?
On Sep 7, 2010, at 4:04 PM, Ben Campbell wrote:
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
<http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.
Document: draft-ietf-netmod-dsdl-map-07
Reviewer: Ben Campbell
Review Date: 2010-09-07
IETF LC End Date: 2010-09-07
IESG Telechat date: (if known)
Summary: The draft is basically ready for publication as a proposed standard.
I have a few editorial comments and nits that should be considered if there
is another revision.
Note: This draft delves deeply into XML esoterica, and I am far from an XML
expert. I assume the authors and work group feel this has had sufficient
review from XML experts (and as far as I know, they _are_ the experts). I
also assume the schemas, etc, have been mechanically verified. If not, I
suggest this be done as much as practical.
Major issues:
None
Minor issues:
Nits/editorial comments:
-- Idnits complains about a number of normative references to external
documents. I don't know if that's a problem--I merely point it out for
consideration. It looks like it's mostly ISO docs, so I doubt there's an issue
-- There are a number of acronyms that should be expanded on first use. E.g.
YANG, RELAX NG, XLST, etc.
-- section 2.1, definition of "implicit node"
Can a node be considered implicit if it is _not_ missing? If not, then the
"if missing" condition is non-contraining.
-- section 3, 1st sentence:
s/by/with
-- section 9.1.1:
Is it explicitly illegal for a mandatory node to have a default?
-- section 9.1.1, third paragraph from the end:
"...and only if..." seems non-constraining in context.
-- section 13
This looks sort of light, when compared with the template in 3688. I'm not
exactly sure how to apply that to a namespace, since I guess there is no XML
to include, but it probably at least needs a registrant contact for each URL.
-- Author's addresses:
Is Rohan's affiliation current?
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