Specific comments:
Section 2.1, second paragraph:
The allocation and registration functions for all non-reserved AS
numbers are handled by the Internet Numbers Registry System in
accordance with policies developed by the Regional Internet
Registries (RIRs).
I might suggest:
"The allocation and registration functions for all non-reserved AS numbers
are currently handled by the Internet Numbers Registry System in accordance
with policies developed via the Regional Internet Registries' (RIRs) public
policy development processes."
Section 2.2, first paragraph:
The allocation and registration functions for all non-reserved
globally unique unicast IPv4 unicast addresses are handled by the
Internet Numbers Registry System in accordance with policies
developed by the Regional Internet Registries (RIRs).
Similar to the previous suggestion (dropping a redundant 'unicast'):
"The allocation and registration functions for all non-reserved globally
unique unicast IPv4 addresses are currently handled by the Internet Numbers
Registry System in accordance with policies developed via the RIRs' public
policy development processes."
Section 2.3, second paragraph:
The allocation and registration functions for all non-reserved
globally unique unicast IPv6 unicast addresses are handled by the
Internet Numbers Registry System in accordance with policies
developed by the Regional Internet Registries (RIRs).
Similar to the previous suggestion (also dropping a redundant 'unicast'):
"The allocation and registration functions for all non-reserved globally
unique unicast IPv6 addresses are currently handled by the Internet Numbers
Registry System in accordance with policies developed via the RIRs' public
policy development processes."
In all three cases you are proposing to change "are handled" to "are currently
handled"
Could you kindly explain the rationale for this proposed change in wording, as
the subtle distinction between the two terms is, I'm afraid, somewhat lost on
me.
regards,
Geoff