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Document: draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review Date: 2015-11-13
IETF LC End Date: 2015-11-24
IESG Telechat date: unknown
Summary: Almost Ready
Major Concerns: None
Minor Concerns:
Sections 4.1 and 5.3.1 inclues a reference to [802.1Q-2011]. Should
this be the 2014 version of the document? If not, please add the
informative reference for [802.1Q-2011].
Other Editorial Comments:
The Abstract should appear on the title page.
Section 3 needs a reference for MEF 6.1:
s/Specification MEF 6.1/Specification MEF 6.1 [MEF6.1]/
Also, [MEF6.1] needs to be added as a normative reference.
Section 3 needs a reference for IEEE 802.1Q-2003:
s/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003 [802.1Q-2003]/
Also, please add an informative reference for [802.1Q-2003].
Third level section headings do not have space between the section
number and the section title. For example:
s/5.3.1.PW Processing/5.3.1. PW Processing/
In Fig 4, there is room to shift the figure to the right, this will
allow the "AC" labels to fit better on the left:
+----------------------------------------+
| VPLS-capable PE model |
| +---------------+ +------+ |
| | |==========|TVSI-1|------------
+---+ AC | | ------------ |------------ PWs
|CE |----------| Bridge ------------ |------------
+---+ | | | Root & +------+ |
| | Module | Leaf VLAN o |
| | | o |
| | | o |
| | | o |
| | | o |
+---+ AC | | | VLAN-n +------+ |
|CE |----------| ------------VSI-n |-------------
+---+ | | |==========| |------------- PWs
| | | ^ | |-------------
| +---------------+ | +------+ |
| | |
+-------------------------|--------------+
LAN emulation Interface
Figure 4 A VPLS PE Model for E-Tree with a Single T-VSI