Russ,
Thanks for the comments.
On Mon, 07 Apr 2003 17:06:25 -0400
Russ Housley <housley(_at_)vigilsec(_dot_)com> wrote:
I have four comments on draft-ietf-smime-camellia-02.txt.
1. The reference to RFC 2119 does not belong in the Abstract. It belongs
in the Introduction. Many documents place it in a subsection of the
Introduction, called "Terminology"
2. I propose an alternative Abstract:
This document specifies the conventions for using the Camellia
encryption algorithm for encryption with the Cryptographic
Message Syntax (CMS).
3. I propose an alternative for the first paragraph in the Introduction:
This document specifies the conventions for using the Camellia
encryption algorithm [CamelliaSpec][CamelliaID] for encryption with
the Cryptographic Message Syntax (CMS) [CMS]. The relevant object
identifiers (OIDs) and processing steps are provided so that
Camellia may be used in the CMS specification (RFC 3369, RFC 3370)
for content and key encryption.
I summarized above three comments, rewrote as follows.
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Abstract
This document specifies the conventions for using the Camellia
encryption algorithm for encryption with the Cryptographic
Message Syntax (CMS).
1. Introduction
This document specifies the conventions for using the Camellia
encryption algorithm [CamelliaSpec][CamelliaID] for encryption with
the Cryptographic Message Syntax (CMS) [CMS]. The relevant object
identifiers (OIDs) and processing steps are provided so that
Camellia may be used in the CMS specification (RFC 3369, RFC 3370)
for content and key encryption.
1.1 Camellia
Camellia ....(snip)
1.2 Terminology
The key words "MUST", "MUST NOT", "REQUIRED", "SHOULD", "SHOULD
NOT", "RECOMMENDED", "MAY", and "OPTIONAL" in this document (in
uppercase, as shown) are to be interpreted as described in
[RFC2119].
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If your intention is this text, I want to rewrite in this way.
4. The ASN.1 module needs a module identifier. Please send email to
ietf-smime-oid-reg(_at_)imc(_dot_)org if you want it assigned from the S/MIME
WG arc.
I sent this mail since I wanted to register this OID.
Best regards.
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