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Re: Gen-art review of draft-lear-iana-timezone-database-03

2011-04-26 10:31:27
Hi Elwyn,

Thank you again for the review.  Please see below.

Summary:
Almost ready for the IESG.  This is my second review of the document.  

I suggested in the previous review that it might make life easier, 
particularly 
if an appeal was ever entered, if the document didn't use the RFC 5226 
Designated 
Expert mechanism but defined the role separately.  This hasn't happened but 
the 
distinction is now clearer.  To make it quite clear I would be inclined to 
add 
'except as regards appeals against decisions of the Designated Expert 
(see Section 5)' after [RFC5226] in the definition of TZ Coordinator in 
Section 2.

I've adopted your above suggested wording.

Otherwise there are a couple of editorial nits.   

.
Nits/Editorial:
s3: s/policy policy/policy/ (repeated word)

Corrected.
s8, first para: s/filling/filling the role/ (maybe 'post')

This text changed based on another review.

s8, last para: s/TZ Coordinators/TZ Coordinator/

Corrected.
s10: s/Elwin/Elwyn/ (thanks for the ack!)

Corrected and apologies! I hate when that happens to me!

Eliot
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