Hi Jari,
I got the message from the responsible AD that a new version shall be submitted
only after the telechat.
And all the resolutions will be included in that version.
Thanks,
Yuanlong
-----Original Message-----
From: Jari Arkko [mailto:jari(_dot_)arkko(_at_)piuha(_dot_)net]
Sent: Thursday, December 03, 2015 8:08 PM
To: Jiangyuanlong; Russ Housley
Cc: draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree(_dot_)all(_at_)ietf(_dot_)org; IETF
Gen-ART; IETF
Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10
Many thanks for your detailed review, Russ!
Yuanlong, will there be a new draft version or other edits before the draft is
approved?
Jari
On 17 Nov 2015, at 00:53, Jiangyuanlong <jiangyuanlong(_at_)huawei(_dot_)com>
wrote:
Russ,
Thanks a lot for your review and good observations.
Please see my comments in line.
Best regards,
Yuanlong
-----Original Message-----
From: Russ Housley [mailto:housley(_at_)vigilsec(_dot_)com]
Sent: Saturday, November 14, 2015 1:28 AM
To: draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree(_dot_)all(_at_)ietf(_dot_)org
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Subject: Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10
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Document: draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review Date: 2015-11-13
IETF LC End Date: 2015-11-24
IESG Telechat date: unknown
Summary: Almost Ready
Major Concerns: None
Minor Concerns:
Sections 4.1 and 5.3.1 inclues a reference to [802.1Q-2011]. Should
this be the 2014 version of the document? If not, please add the
informative reference for [802.1Q-2011].
[YJ] Yes, all these should refer to [802.1Q-2014].
Other Editorial Comments:
The Abstract should appear on the title page.
[YJ] OK.
Section 3 needs a reference for MEF 6.1:
s/Specification MEF 6.1/Specification MEF 6.1 [MEF6.1]/ Also,
[MEF6.1] needs to be added as a normative reference.
[YJ] All these will be updated to MEF 6.2.
Section 3 needs a reference for IEEE 802.1Q-2003:
s/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003 [802.1Q-2003]/
Also, please add an informative reference for [802.1Q-2003].
[YJ] Yes, we will add an informative reference for [802.1Q-2003].
Third level section headings do not have space between the section
number and the section title. For example:
s/5.3.1.PW Processing/5.3.1. PW Processing/
[YJ] OK.
In Fig 4, there is room to shift the figure to the right, this will allow
the
"AC"
labels to fit better on the left:
+----------------------------------------+
| VPLS-capable PE model |
| +---------------+ +------+ |
| | |==========|TVSI-1|------------
+---+ AC | | ------------ |------------ PWs
|CE |----------| Bridge ------------ |------------
+---+ | | | Root & +------+ |
| | Module | Leaf VLAN o |
| | | o |
| | | o |
| | | o |
| | | o |
+---+ AC | | | VLAN-n +------+ |
|CE |----------| ------------VSI-n |-------------
+---+ | | |==========| |-------------
PWs
| | | ^ | |-------------
| +---------------+ | +------+ |
| | |
+-------------------------|--------------+
LAN emulation Interface
Figure 4 A VPLS PE Model for E-Tree with a Single T-VSI
[YJ] OK.
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