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RE: [Gen-art] Review of draft-holmberg-dispatch-mcptt-rp-namespace-03

2016-12-20 13:40:42
On the technical comment below, section 12.5 in RFC4412 has those parameters.

For the MCPTT data transfer, I think it should state "For the MCPTT data 
transfer service currently..."

The rest are more or less trivial editorials.

Regards,
Jörgen

-----Original Message-----
From: Fernando Gont [mailto:fgont(_at_)si6networks(_dot_)com] 
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Review of draft-holmberg-dispatch-mcptt-rp-namespace-03

Folks,

Apologies: wasn't sure whether the tool would insert the "boilerplate", so... 
here it is:

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Here's my review:


On 12/16/2016 06:46 PM, Fernando Gont wrote:
Reviewer: Fernando Gont
Review result: Ready with Nits

** Technical **

* Section 3, pages 3-4:
   Intended algorithm for mcpttq is queuing.

   New Warning cde: No.

   New SIP response code: No.

Is this kind of thing really needed/required in the registry?



** Editorial **

* Section 1, page 2:
   The third generation partnership project (3GPP)

May be you should capitalize these? (i.e., "Third Generation...")


* Section 1, page 2:
In addition to this a commercial PTT
   service for non-professional use (e.g., groups of people on
holiday)

Please insert a comma after "this".


* Section 1, page 3:
MCPTT data transfer currently under development can
   benefit from a queueing mechanism.

"data transfer..." protocols?


* Section 2, page 3:
The use of this namespace outside such network is
   undefined.

s/network/networks/


* Section 5, page 5:
5.  IANA Considerations

   Abiding by the rules established within [RFC4412] and [RFC7134],
this
   is an Informative RFC registering two new namespaces, their
   associated priority-values, and intended algorithms.

s/registering/creating/ ?


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