Hi Ralph,
Thank you for the review. We will have all acronyms expansion in next version
and add a reference for DC services.
Regards,
Lucy
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Subject: [Gen-art] Review of draft-ietf-nvo3-use-case-15
Reviewer: Ralph Droms
Review result: Ready with Nits
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Document: draft-ietf-nvo3-use-case-??
Reviewer: Ralph Droms
Review Date: 2017-01-06
IETF LC End Date: 2017-01-11
IESG Telechat date: 2017-01-19
Summary: This draft is ready for publication as an Informational RFC.
Major issues: None
Minor issues: None
Nits/editorial comments:
I found several acronyms that did not have expansions. I recommend a pass over
the document for unexpanded acronyms..
Section 2: What is "broadcast/unknown" traffic (spec. "unknown"?); please
expand the acronym "BUM".
The paragraph that begins with "One NVO3 network [...]" is indented
differently from the rest of the text. Intentional or a typo?
Section 3.2: An illustrating figure for the use case described in this section
would be helpful.
Expand acronyms "PE" and "ABSR".
I found the text using "Option A" and "Option B" confusing. Exactly what are
those options?
Section 5: I didn't understand the references to IaaS, PaaS and SaaS in the
summary - there are no references to those services in the body of the
document, or back pointers from the summary to relevant preceding text.
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