Dan,
Thanks for the review.
Adverse actions include cases where the CA or repository manager is not
attacked or did not make an error, as noted in the Introduction:
Note that the CA that allocated the affected INRs may be acting in accordance
with established policy, and thus the change may be contractually justified,
even though viewed as adverse by the INR holder.
Thus I believe the title is appropriate.
We chose to labels actions with an "A" to distinguish them and to allow
numbering of actions to begin at "1". If we label actions by subsection, the
labels will become longer, which we felt was awkward.
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Subject: Review of draft-ietf-sidr-adverse-actions-03
Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
Review result: Ready with Nits
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Document: draft-ietf-sidr-adverse-actions-03
Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
Review Date: 2017-01-09
IETF LC End Date: 2017-01-10
IESG Telechat date: 2017-01-19
Summary:
Major issues:
Minor issues:
Nits/editorial comments:
1. The title is slightly misleading, it can be interpreted that the
document deals with cases where the CA or Resource Manager initiate
the attacks. In reality the document deals with attacks made possible
by the fact that the CA or Resource Managers are themselves under
attack, or some management mistakes were made at the CA or Resource
Manager. I would suggest a change in the title of the document:
s/Adverse Actions by a Certification Authority (CA) or Repository
Manager/Adverse Actions by means of a Certification Authority (CA) or
Repository Manager/
2. It is not clear why the numbering of the actions in the subsections
of section 2 (2.1, 2,2, etc.) are prefixed by A, rather than
continuing the indentation under 2.1, 2.2, etc. In other words - why
A-1.1 and not 2.1.1, A-1.1.1 and not 2.1.1.1, etc.