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RE: Review of draft-ietf-softwire-multicast-prefix-option-11

2017-01-10 00:44:20
Hi Sheng, 

Thank you for the review. 

Please see inline. 

Cheers,
Med

-----Message d'origine-----
De : Sheng Jiang [mailto:jiangsheng(_at_)huawei(_dot_)com]
Envoyé : mardi 10 janvier 2017 04:55
À : ops-dir(_at_)ietf(_dot_)org
Cc : softwires(_at_)ietf(_dot_)org; ietf(_at_)ietf(_dot_)org; 
draft-ietf-softwire-multicast-
prefix-option(_dot_)all(_at_)ietf(_dot_)org
Objet : Review of draft-ietf-softwire-multicast-prefix-option-11

Reviewer: Sheng Jiang
Review result: Has Nits

Summary: This draft is almost ready for publication as a standard
track RFC.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

“the specification of a DHCPv6 option that could be used to discover
   unicast PREFIX64s in environments where multicast is not enabled.
   Such side effect conflicts with the recommendation documented in
   Section 6 of [RFC7051].”

It is unclear how the Section 6 of RFC7051 relevant with the content
above. It would be necessary to quote particular content of RFC7051
and give necessary analysis.


[Med] What about:  

OLD: 

   Note that it was tempting to define three distinct DHCPv6 options,
   but that approach was not adopted because it has a side effect: the
   specification of a DHCPv6 option that could be used to discover
   unicast PREFIX64s in environments where multicast is not enabled.
   Such side effect conflicts with the recommendation documented in
   Section 6 of [RFC7051].

NEW: 
   Note that it was tempting to define three distinct DHCPv6 options,
   but that approach was not adopted because it has a side effect: the
   specification of a DHCPv6 option that could be used to discover
   unicast PREFIX64s in environments where multicast is not enabled.
   Such side effect conflicts with the recommendation documented in
   Section 6 of [RFC7051]. As a reminder, that recommendation is to
                           ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
   to support the Well-Known DNS Name heuristic discovery-based method
   ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
   for unicast-only environments.
   ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ 

Better?

Nits:

“the Pv4 multicast address is inserted in the last 32 bits of the
IPv4-embedded IPv6
   multicast address.”

Pv4//IPv4
[Med] Fixed.