Reviewer: Rich Salz
Review result: Has Nits
The term "ufrag" should be explained, or at least have a reference on
its first use. It seems important :)
I think the "fingerprint" reference should be moved up to the bullet
list in section 4, from the bullet list in 5.1
Sec 4 uses the term "cryptographic random function" which is not a
common security term. (See
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cryptographically_secure_pseudorandom_number_generator)
I would just say "strong random function"; it's the number of random
bits that counts. Or use CSPRNG as the term.
In Sec 9, it seems like quoting all the old text is way too verbose.
I would just say "replace with the following NEW TEXT"
If it's not replacing an entire section, then say "the nnn paragraphs
starting with xxxxx" or similar construct.