Reviewer: Patrice Brissette
Review result: Has Issues
[Resending to RTG-DIR]
Hello,
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Document: draft-ietf-pals-p2mp-pw-02.txt
Reviewer: Patrice Brissette
Review Date: May 10, 2017
IETF LC End Date: May 12, 2017
Intended Status: Standard Track
Summary:
• I have some minor concerns about this document that I think should
be resolved before publication.
Comments:
• Please supply an overview of the draft quality and readability.
• Include anything else that you think will be helpful toward
understanding your review.
Major Issues:
• "No major issues found."
Minor Issues:
• Technically, I think the draft is completed. However, it doesn’t
flow very well. Information is all over. I suggest the authors to
review the layout/flow of the document.
Here are my “detailed” comments:
Abstract — What is the plus value on that draft? No clear
Many Long sentences in the text. very hard to understand and follow.
Syntax to be improved.
Introduction
Typo : “A reference model or a P2MP PW is depicted in Figure 1 below”
“In this document, we specify a method of signaling P2MP
PW using LDP.” —> suggest to move it from intro to abstract
Also, make sure the 3rd person is used. Try to a void “we” usage
May I suggest to have a requirement section. Requirements are all over
the document.
“ In case of mLDP, a Leaf-PE can decide to join the P2MP LSP at any
time; whereas in the case of RSVP-TE, the P2MP LSP is set up by
the
R-PE, generally at the initial service provisioning time. It
should
be noted that local policy can override any decision to join, add
or
prune existing or new L-PE(s) from the tree. In any case, the PW
setup can ignore these differences, and simply assume that the
P2MP
PSN LSP is available when needed
“
Quite complex to follow. Missing to “why” / explanation.
“The LDP liberal label retention mode is used“
Another requirement… is that a MAY, SHOULD, MUST?
“In this case, a PW status message with status
code of 0x00000008 (Local PSN-facing PW (ingress) Receive Fault)
MUST
also be sent to the R-PE“
How? The L-PE fails to join the P2MP PSN LSP.
Section 2.2
“ Note that since the LDP label mapping message is only sent by the
R-
PE to all the L-PEs, it is not possible to negotiate any interface
parameters.“
Why is that note there? Is that already been mentioned previously.
Fig.4 must be moved to proper in the text OR create 2 subsection in
2.2
“As such, PW status negotiation procedure
described in [RFC4447bis] is not applicable to P2MP PW. A node
MUST
NOT claim to be P2MP PW capable by sending a LDP P2MP PW
Capability
TLV if it is not also capable of handling PW status“
Should a node send LDP P2MP PW Capability TLV or not? Not well explain
There is some reference to LSR in the text where the major part use
the wording “node”.
Nits:
N/A
Regards,
Patrice Brissette