Extremely minor comment:
I really would not had commented on this, but we just had a rather lengthy
discussion about proper syntax in the SMTP WG and how a systems may reject
the transaction due to improper syntax. You need angle brackets around the
return path (MAIL FROM:) and forward path (RCPT TO:)
C: MAIL FROM: <steve(_at_)example(_dot_)org>
S: 250 2.1.0
steve(_at_)example(_dot_)org(_dot_)(_dot_)(_dot_)(_dot_)Sender OK
C: RCPT TO: <paul(_at_)example(_dot_)com>
S: 250 2.1.5 paul(_at_)example(_dot_)comSo it might be best to show syntax
correct examples.
Minor stuff. Otherwise the document sounds look to me!
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Hector Santos, Santronics Software, Inc.
http://www.santronics.com
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From: "Tony Hansen" <tony(_at_)att(_dot_)com>
To: <ietf-openproxy(_at_)imc(_dot_)org>
Cc: "Markus Hofmann" <markus(_at_)mhof(_dot_)com>
Sent: Wednesday, July 06, 2005 4:16 PM
Subject: Re: I-D ACTION:draft-ietf-opes-smtp-use-cases-02.txt
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I did a thorough review of this version of the document and really like
it. It has a number of small nits that I'll address in a separate email
message (typos, etc.), but I think that the basic document is fairly
well structured, succinct and clear.
The only semi-major change I'd consider making to it would be to copy a
version of Figure 2 (without the OCP callouts) into the Brief Overview,
after the paragraph "SMTP commands are...". Figure 1 and Figure 2 as
they are now have a lot of differrences, and it would make it clearer
when it gets to the current Figure 2 exactly what OPES is adding to the
mix.
As I said, I think this is a good document.
Tony Hansen
tony(_at_)att(_dot_)com
Internet-Drafts(_at_)ietf(_dot_)org wrote:
A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts
directories.
This draft is a work item of the Open Pluggable Edge Services Working
Group of the IETF.
Title : OPES SMTP Use Cases
Author(s) : A. Barbir, M. Stecher
Filename : draft-ietf-opes-smtp-use-cases-02.txt
Pages : 16
Date : 2005-7-6
The Open Pluggable Edge Services (OPES) framework is application
agnostic. Application specific adaptations extend that framework.
This document describes OPES SMTP use cases and deployment scenarios
in preparation for SMTP adaptation with OPES.
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