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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may
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Document: draft-ietf-mpls-rsvp-te-no-php-oob-mapping
Reviewer: Ben Campbell
Review Date: 2011-08-12
IETF LC End Date: 2011-08-12
Summary: This document is almost ready for publication as a proposed standard.
There are a few editorial issues and nits that should be considered prior to
publication.
Major issues:
None
Minor issues:
None
Nits/editorial comments:
-- Please proofread for missing articles (i.e. a, an, the)
-- idnits reports some issues, please check.
-- section 1:
It would be helpful to include an explicit definition of " non-Penultimate Hop
Popping behavior" somewhere in the introduction.
-- section 1, paragraph 2: "P2MP"
Please expand on first mention. I see you did in the abstract, but it should be
redone in the body.
-- section 2.2, last paragraph: "w.r.t."
Please spell out
-- section 3: First paragraph: " Addition of "non-PHP behavior" adds a variable
of attacks on the label assigned by the Egress node. "
Is "variable" the correct word?
-- IANA Considerations:
Please include the explicit names of the registry to be changed.
-- 6.1, "[RFC 2119]"
The space between RFC and 2119 confused idnits, and may confuse other tools.
-- 6.1, [RFC5920]
This is an informational draft. Does the reference need to be normative?
-- general:
I am unable to read the title without thinking of this:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hop_on_Pop :-)
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