Hi Elwyn,
Thanks for your review! See inline.
Nits/editorial comments:
s1, para 2: s/TLS protocol/The TLS protocol/ (as per RFC 4572)
I will fix as suggested.
s4, para 2: s/a new protocol identifier/the protocol identifier/ (it
isn't new any more)
I am happy to remove ³new², but doesn¹t ³a² still sound better than ³the²?
s5.1: Suggest s/m- line/"m" line/ for consistency with s3.4
I will replace with single quotes (Œm¹), for consistency with s3.4 and s4.
s5.1, para 1: s/e.g./e.g.,/
I will fix as suggested.
s5.1, para 4: s/that each used certificate matches/that each
certificate used matches/
I will fix as suggested.
s5.1, para 5: s/each used certificate matches/each certificate used
matches/
I will fix as suggested.
s8, para 5: ' This specification creates a new IANA registry named
"Hash Function Textual Names".'
The registry is no longer new. Perhaps s/creates a new IANA
registry/takes over the IANA registry from RFC 4572/
I suggest:
"This specification takes over the IANA registry named "Hash Function
Textual Names², that was created in RFC 4572. It will not be part of
the SDP Parameters.²
Regards,
Christer