Responding to the items/topics that have been recorded as issue 727
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[mailto:iesg-bounces(_at_)ietf(_dot_)org]On Behalf Of
Margaret Wasserman
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Subject: Last Call Comments on draft-ietf-iasa-bcp-02.txt
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This document
does not affect the ISOC-IETF working relationship as it relates to
standards development or the communication of technical advice
relevant to the policy and educational goals of ISOC.
I'd cite RFCs 2026 and 2048 as references here.
Mmm... 2026 seems fine.
Not sure about 2048. That is about MIME stuff !!??
So which one do you mean? Probably 2031?
My current edit buffer now says:
This document
does not affect the ISOC-IETF working relationship as it relates to
standards development [RFC2026, RFC2031] or the communication of
technical advice relevant to the policy and educational goals of ISOC.
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2.5 Effective Date for Commencement of IASA
The procedures in this document shall become operational immediately
after this document has been approved by the process defined in BCP 9
[RFC2026] and has been affirmed by a Resolution of agreement by the
ISOC Board of Trustees.
Just a minor wording suggestion... Unless "Resolution of agreement"
is some type of legal phrase, I'd make the following change:
s/Resolution of agreement by/resolution of/
The ISOC Board has some wording that we use for these cases. We
will accept the document and agree to carry out our
responsibilities, as described therein. We don't use the words
"Reolution of agreement" to describe that, though.
I have made this change for now.
But it may change completely pending the outcome of Issue 739, or so I think.
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The IAOC may also choose to invite liaisons from other groups, but is
not required to do so; the IAOC decides whether or not to have a
liaison to any particular group. Any such liaisons are non-voting.
Responsibility for selecting the individual filling a particular
liaison role with the body from which the IAOC has requested the
liaison.
This last sentence isn't a sentence. Perhaps:
s/role with/role lies with/ ?
done
Appointed members of the IAOC serve two year terms. IAOC terms
normally end at the first IETF meeting of a year, just as as IAB and
IESG terms do.
The members of the IAOC shall select one of its appointed voting
members to serve as the chair of the IAOC, with all of the duties and
responsibilities normally associated with such a position.
I'd remove everything after the comma. There is no clear concept
of what duties and responsibilities would normally be associated
with such a position, and you have specific responsibilities and
limits listed later.
No change made. It had quite some discussion during rev 01.
And we then seemed to have agreed (to me at least) on taking
the text from the IAB doc (RFC2850, sect 3.1) and not fiddle
with the words (as had been done earlier).
So after that earlier discussion on the text, I do not see this
as just an editorial change.
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All
contracts executed by ISOC on behalf of IASA shall either include
a clause allowing termination or transfer by ISOC with six months
notice, or shall be transferable to another corporation in the
event that the IASA transitions away from ISOC.
s/or transfer// (it is redundant with the second half of
this sentence).
done
Any accrued
funds, any IETF-specific intellectual property rights, and any
IETF-specific data and tools shall also transition to the new
entity.
By "accrued funds", you presumably mean funds that are currently
held in the IASA accounts. So, why not just say so?
Mmm... I am sort of with you.
AT the other hand, I see continued discussion about "ISOC should not
credit xxx to IASA accounts".
So I am not sure your suggestion is just editorial. If we keep all the
current text about crediting money to IASA accounts, then it is editorial.
But given the ongoing discussion, I have not (yet) made the change.
Bert
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