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Re: Last Call: <draft-ietf-manet-nhdp-optimization-03.txt> (An Optimization for the MANET Neighborhood Discovery Protocol (NHDP)) to Proposed Standard

2014-11-03 04:26:25

On Nov 3, 2014, at 10:58, Dearlove, Christopher (UK) 
<chris(_dot_)dearlove(_at_)baesystems(_dot_)com> wrote:

Adrian Farrel
AB
2- The draft mentions in the introduction:- This modification is 
strictly optional,

[AB] the reviewer suggests to include in the ID-Abstract that this 
standard is optional. It is not enough to only mention in the 
introduction such important information.

Good point.

The abstract does actually say "to permit", which indicates this is not 
mandatory. But we can add the word optional to that.

Hm, after having re-read the abstract, I am not actually sure that adding the 
word “optional” brings you anything: pretty much the whole last paragraph 
states that as optional, as Chris writes, “…to permit…” and then “this allows…” 
etc.

I believe that the abstract does what it is supposed to do, i.e., calls out the 
documents that it updates and briefly summarizes the update. I do not see any 
overwhelming reason to stuff more words into it.

Regarding the title, there's a usual tradeoff between brevity (and it's 
already not brief) and detail. I wouldn't add the suggests "based on link 
quality" as that really adds nothing useful (it's not an optimisation based 
on link quality, it's an optimisation to remove a side-effect of the use of 
link quality). To be a useful lengthening of the title, it would, I think, 
have to mention something about the two hop neighbourhood. I haven't 
consulted with my co-author, but my proposal would be to see if anyone on the 
IESG has a problem with the title as-is.

Agree 100% with Chris here.

Thomas


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